Show vs tell is ok.
Who you are, how you talk etc. Attracting the right kind of people.
That doesn’t assure leads and response because,
The aim is not hanging out with you. Don’t make that mistake of thinking that it is only about attracting your kind of people by how you are as an individual.
The outcome is important.
People want to know HOW you are going to deliver the service and get the outcome.
And WHY you are in a good position to do it. Can you really deliver? Show us some proof.
Now, when the above two are done in your style, there is reason for your kind of people to not just notice you, but pay you money for getting an outcome.